Well, I got my first review from a online friend name Jesse. I will paste it below. He sent me an email.

Hello Anita, you were the very first person to post a review, so I read the part of the book that you posted. Funny thing is, I used to know this girl named Liz, in my life, and she had a big mouth, a real big mouth. She had such a big mouth that she almost got me fired from a job.
Anyway, my mind is a little foggy so I'm tired, but I think what little prose you have posted is better than most. Their personalities and emotions seem to really come through clear in the prose. Their quotes are unique, as if it is two different people speaking. I'm not sure where the story is going yet, but its a very classic kind of scene. There's nothing wrong with your segment, but just to tell you my taste, I like a book that's original in some way. I like to pick up something, read it and be like damn- I haven't ever read anything like that before!